I enjoyed the most recent version best, although I thought your strategy to break out certain word on clear, individual lines was really interesting. You're definitely right though, the more recent one reads tighter, and in this particular case, that one spoke to me just a tad more! Beautiful poem, and I love that it came from an unusual dream!
As far as dreaming in scenes and storylines, there's a novel I'm slowly working on (although it's not my "current" project), and it's based on a dream I had. It's got castles and deals with lost memory and a world that seems to be slowly dying.
It's cool how inspiration for writing can come from different places. Where do you usually get your inspiration from?
Ooh, that sounds like a very cool project! I've always loved castles!
I tend to draw a lot of inspiration from my natural surroundings and people I know, but come to think of it, my current project started as a theme from a dream I had and has morphed into a much larger, more complex story.
I like the 2nd version- even more room for me to put myself into your writing. beautifully articulated & I agree, poetry is even more challenging than traditional writing. Every word costs. Brilliant!
The first came across as weird (in the sense of other but not ominous). The italicized phrases and words set them off, and they came across more weighty, and the sense was more ominous. This has really got me thinking.
I enjoyed the most recent version best, although I thought your strategy to break out certain word on clear, individual lines was really interesting. You're definitely right though, the more recent one reads tighter, and in this particular case, that one spoke to me just a tad more! Beautiful poem, and I love that it came from an unusual dream!
I appreciate your input!
As far as dreaming in scenes and storylines, there's a novel I'm slowly working on (although it's not my "current" project), and it's based on a dream I had. It's got castles and deals with lost memory and a world that seems to be slowly dying.
It's cool how inspiration for writing can come from different places. Where do you usually get your inspiration from?
Ooh, that sounds like a very cool project! I've always loved castles!
I tend to draw a lot of inspiration from my natural surroundings and people I know, but come to think of it, my current project started as a theme from a dream I had and has morphed into a much larger, more complex story.
I like the 2nd version- even more room for me to put myself into your writing. beautifully articulated & I agree, poetry is even more challenging than traditional writing. Every word costs. Brilliant!
Thanks! Your writing is concise and lyrical, in prose, yet you manage to say so much with few words. That's a challenge. 😊
thank you friend. 🥰
The first came across as weird (in the sense of other but not ominous). The italicized phrases and words set them off, and they came across more weighty, and the sense was more ominous. This has really got me thinking.